hey guys please read this!!!

HI there guys,please i need to quickly call your attention to my last update no 16,i have made a series of mistakes and typographical errors as i mistakenly posted the draft which were still riddled with mistakes instead of the finished portion,i only realised this while going over the next update which i am preparing to post i have corrected it and you can go back and read it.
The areas that i have corrected are in blue and i have also left a message in bold as well i do apologise for this and will make sure this does not happen anymore.
thanks